CLASS 2: REVIEW
& ASSESSMENT
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HW 1 DUE TODAY by
midnight : Goldmines
1) Sample 100
topics vs Narrowing lesson and creating your own
2) Some (calendar dates) extra credit opportunities (eg
CLASI)
3) ID#’s vs
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you read syllabus
4)
Creative vs Expository
5)
What is a thesis / argumentative thesis
6)
TPEOEO: STANDARD
ISSUE
*Assessment Essay:
Remember: this is for
assessment – does NOT count towards your grade.
If
your essay were graded as an A, you get +2 points of extra credit.
If
your essay were graded as a B, you get +1 points of extra credit.
Anything
else will disappear.
As a ¾ page to no
more than 1 page essay, using citations if you know what they are, answer the following
question using the source handout:
What are the benefits
and problems of using artificial skin for scientific testing?
-- ASSESSMENT ESSAYS RULES
intro (no quote or counts as ‘extra’ quote)
Argument 1: Benefit or Problem (w/ 1 quote , with attribution to the source
[the magazine title or magazine article author) not just ‘who said’ eg Goldberg – WHY?) MLA
Argument 2: Benefit or Problem (with 1 quote , with attribution to the source
[the magazine title or magazine article author) not just ‘who said’ eg Hewitt– WHY?)
Conclusion (brief closer, no
quote, or quote for impact not evidence)
NO WORKS CITED:
Real paper? Minimum 2 quotes per argument:
**Discuss PAPER DESCRIPTION and 100 SAMPLE TOPICS (remember you can create your own using
narrowing process in next class) MAJOR
PAPERS & RUBRIC (HANDOUT)
***CLASI:
(extra cred) You will get a
completion form as proof of completion
(+1 pt
for up to 2 attended [only 1 online for EC points only])
http://www.cgc.maricopa.edu/Academics/Support/CLASI/Pages/default.aspx
Extra
Credit possibilities and penalties:
It is possible to get extra
credit points towards replacement of final exam!
*Takes 7 points to buy
replacement of final exam–score of
final replaced depends on final tally of extra credit points;
7 points = 90/A |
10 points = 93/A |
13 points = 96/A |
8 points = 91/A |
11 points = 94/A |
14 points = 97/A |
9 points = 92/A |
12 points = 95/A |
15 points = 98/A |
*Negative points are
penalties and apply to paper grade if not covered by points;
HOW TO GET EXTRA CREDIT POINTS: (There are
also activities discussed in class that change each semester)
0)Clasi
extra credits |
0, +1, +2 |
1) In-Class Group Paper 0, Death Penalty |
0, +1, +2 |
2)In-Class Group Grade
sample paper 1 |
+3(exact), +2(within 3),
+1(within 6) |
3)Don’t submit anything for
paper 1 draft 1 at all or Don’t show up/don’t hand in at least 1
peer editing report on someone’s paper 1draft1 |
-5 |
4)Visit to Writing Center |
+1 to +2 (one credited per
paper) |
5)In-Class Group Grade
sample paper 2 |
+3(exact), +2(within 3),
+1(within 6) |
6)Credibility
exercise/lesson |
+1 |
7)Class Assessment survey |
+1 |
8)Don’t submit anything for
paper 1 draft 1 at all or Don’t show up/don’t hand in at least 1
peer editing report on someone’s paper2draft1 |
-5 |
CREATIVE
ESSAY “I’m Special” vs EXPOSITORY ESSAY
ENG101 ENG102
Creative
Composition |
Argumentative
research |
“I”
believe/ “I” feel / “I” Think |
“Facts
show” [never/rarely use I except maybe in conclusion and intro] – confident
universal statements |
Opinion |
Proof |
Creative
examples |
Expert
knowledge w/ quotes & citations |
Listed
personal experience, details of your life and beliefs as source |
3rd
party identified and listed sources, detailed explanations quoted from
outside sources |
Purpose:
Use writing skills to entertain |
Purpose:
to convince someone w/ an open mind |
Fun
and funny and/or moving to readers |
Removed
voice |
Creative
& drama |
Critical
thinking |
Argue
what you feel |
Argue
what you can prove |
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Visual Anatomy of a ENG102
paper (drawing)
Thesis: your paper’s topic,
as a sentence. NEVER A QUESTION if your
thesis is an argumentative thesis. Your papers will not be just informative.
ONE APPROVED THESIS PER PAPER
WHAT IS AN
Argumentative THESIS? A single sentence summary of an argument you are going to
make or point of view you are going to take.
1)NOT A QUESTION /
DOES NOT END IN QUESTION MARK.
BAD: Could drinking tap
water in former
BETTER:Drinking tap water from former
2)SOMEONE CAN
DISAGREE WITH YOU/ TAKE THE OPPOSITE SIDE, otherwise it’s not argumentative.
BAD: Plastic Surgery in teenagers.
BETTER:Plastic surgery in teenagers is a growing trend
caused by peer and media image pressure
BAD:
Preparing a car to win a street race.
BETTER:Chip modification is the most important way to
prepare a car for a street race.
BAD:
Misdiagnosis of Attention Deficit Disorder
BETTER:
Misdiagnosis of Attention Deficit Disorder is leading to overmedication of
school age children.
3)NARROWED TO MATCH
AUDIENCE (See narrowing lesson)
4) TAKES A
BAD: Video games might increase violence in
pre-teens.
BETTER:
Video games increase violence in pre-teens.
BAD:
Sometimes it is possible to use supplements to win bodybuilding contests.
BETTER:
Supplements are now a necessity in order to win bodybuilding contests.
5) BE
For
example: If your approved thesis is:
Grappling
is the most effective mixed martial arts technique in Ultimate Fighting competitions
THEN….
You must compare it
to all other major techniques, and discuss it for defense, offense and counter
moves….
MORE
SPECIFIC means less to cover: Grappling
is the most effective mixed martial arts technique for dealing with reach-based
attack styles in Ultimate Fighting
competitions
Counterarguments
If you can't find any
possible opposite/opposing point of view to your argument, you probably don't
have a thesis in argumentative form. For
1st paper need 1 counter with 2 quotes from 2 different sources. For final paper need 2 counters with 2 quotes
from 2 different sources.
EXAMPLES THESIS/NOT THESIS:
1)WRONG: Effects of nerve gas on soldiers who survive chemical
attacks
OK but weak: Nerve gas has negative effects on soldiers who
survive chemical attacks
OK/ARGUMENTATIVE
2)WRONG:
Problems in treating Alzheimers’ patients
OK but weak: There are
problems in treating Alzheimers’ patients
OK/ARGUMENTATIVE
3)WRONG: Robots and the car industry in the United
States
OK/ARGUMENTATIVE
4) WRONG: Gambling and corruption at the Wild Horse Pass
Casino
OK/ARGUMENTATIVE
II. WHAT does an argumentative paragraph look like?
*Each content
paragraph in an argumentative paper is TPEO or TPEOEO or TPEOEOEO
Topic Sentence: one sentence in EACH paragraph
– what the paragraph is about or paper’s subtopic – in an argumentative paper:
a specific argument under paper’s thesis.
Point: In your own words, how the
topic sentence/subtopic/this paragraph is important to, argues for the paper’s
thesis. ‘Point’ is necessary in
paragraph to prevent lack of clarity or misinterpretation by audience different
POV
Evidence or Example: one of TWO quotes or paraphrased details and
expert knowledge from an outside source that supports your paragraph’s topic
sentences. ALWAYS with a citation
Optional explanation of Evidence: in your own words, commentary
or how the evidence you quoted is important or supports your topic sentence
and/or your paper thesis. Not always
required if your evidence (quote) is straightforward.
SAMPLE PARAGRAPH SHOWING
EACH PART AND ESPECIAL THE ‘E” of evidence/expert knowledge
Thesis: Adopting the aluminum bat instead of the wood bat in amateur
baseball fundamentally changes the game.
YELLOW: T BLUE: P grey =E(vidence/xpert
knowledge)
green: Optional comment
Safety
issues on the playing field increase immensely when aluminum bats are present. In any competitive sport, no one wants anyone to get hurt. Unfortunately aluminum bats increase the risk in baseball. Teams across the country are beginning to
return to the traditional wood bat; one of those teams is the Wellesley
Raiders. Eric Winer, president of the Wellesley American Little
League, said in the July issue of Greater Boston Magazine, “We had an
incident last year…when one of our top pitchers, Billy Hughto,
got struck by a line drive of a metal batted ball and was out for the season”
(22). This incident easily helped Eric Winer make the
decision to switch from aluminum to wood. Winer was not alone in making the safety
choice: “The
Millburn Mullvers tried aluminum bats, but quickly
switched back after a line drive broke the hand of the first baseman despite
gloves. This kind of line drive with
wood bats had never led to an injury” (“Millburn Mullvers
website”).
END
THURSDAY: HOW TO NARROW topics!
III.
NEXT TUESDAY: Assessment ESSAY:
Straight forward
IV. NEXT THURSDAY: GROUP ACTIVITY for Extra Credit!!!!!
GROUP ACTIVITY: PUZZLE
TOGETHER
‘training paper’ of TPEOEO arguments FIRST EXTRA CREDIT ACTIVITY!!!!!
1)EACH
GROUP Randomly assigned a THESIS:
Either FOR QUICK DEATH PENALTY OR
AGAINST DEATH PENALTY.
2)Each
group must pic from list of 23 possible arguments
a)The two weakest for their side
(for their side, but would not use because poor arguments)
b)Pick the 3 BEST arguments from list for their side
3)IMPT: FIND from big list of quotes (a-Z4) 2 quote MATCHES
for each of your 3 best arguments for your side
4)IMPT: WRITE ***ONE*** paragraph in TPEOEO format from you 3 best arguments. JUST ONE!
A)ENG102
GROUP ACTIVITY: Training Paper (SHEETS)
Your
team is assigned to argue __AGAINST any application
of the death penalty.
GROUP # ___________ Members Present: (print names)
_____________________________ _________________________________
_____________________________ _________________________________
Instructions:
·
PART ONE:
The Activity: Agree on/Choose the 3 best/strongest arguments for your
side
Next,
For each argument, match the two best quotes from the sources handout in
support
Choice 1:
_#_______________________________________________________________
Best
quote is LETTER# ___________
Best
quote is LETTER# ___________
Choice 2:
_#_______________________________________________________________
Best
quote is LETTER# ___________
Best
quote is LETTER# ___________
Choice 3: _#_______________________________________________________________
Best
quote is LETTER# ___________
Best
quote is LETTER# ___________
·
PART TWO:
Identify the two weakest arguments you could use supporting an end to the death penalty
(bad choices)from the list and briefly (1-2 sentences) explain why they’re weak.
weakest:
_#_______________________________________________________________
why?
_____________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________
2nd weakest:
_#_______________________________________________________________
why?
_____________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________
·
PART THREE: On the back: As a group, decide on one
argument and evidence and write as a TPEOEO (TPEE) paragraph. Make sure to trim the quotes/evidence to 3
lines or less! Give a citation (not
graded on MLA..yet).
SCORING!:
COMPLETE
1-4 above correctly? Your group gets 1 pt of extra credit!
If ANY
GROUP LISTS AS THEIR 3 CHOICES any of the WEAKEST for their sides: group loses
1 pt of EC!
IF YOU HAVE BOTH WEAKEST? Each group
member loses 2 pts of extra credit!!!!
BEST
TPEOEO paragrarph for each side (For quick death
penalty or Against)? GETS ADDITIONAL pt of extra credit!!!
end
For example, what is
the Difference between these thesis:
“Fast food is a main contributor to the obesity problem in the
What can you cover? What can’t you cover?
“Fast food is the cause of the obesity problem in the US” vs
What can you
cover? What can’t you cover?
“The fast food industry is a major cause of the obesity problem in the US” vs
What can you
cover? What can’t you cover?
“Bad Nutrition is the main reason for the growing obesity problem in the US”
What can you
cover? What can’t you cover?
For each above, can you use below as arguments?:
1)Happy
meals reward kids with toys for eating fast food
2)Fat
content of most pre-frozen food is higher than fresher foods in order to retain
taste
3Food
chemicals and additives are known to affect the metabolism, usually slowing it
down
4)Advertising
targeting children airs heavily on most kid channels such as Nickelodeon
5)Fast
Food is cheap
6)Frozen
microwaveable meals are notoriously low in nutritional value
7)
Portion size is out of control compared to meal portion size from the 1950’s.
What does a basic argumentative paper look like? (pic on board)
Sample paper 1: http://www.newclassroom.com/LMPaper1SAMPLEENG102.pdf
Sample Feedback for an F, C, A paper: http://www.newclassroom.com/samplefeedback.htm
HOW TO MAKE SURE YOUR T
By nature of being
argumentative,
there must exist opposite or
opposing points of view.
Ask this question as a test of whether your thesis is in argumentative
form:
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1)
2) CRACKING THE TIMED ESSAY and SOCRAPR for cracking the
timed or ‘I have no idea’ artistic quality/’how does’ essay
III. Cracking the Essay: maximizing the points in
a timed essay.
Psych portion of Police captain’s
test (proposed/rejected 2002): <a page describing incidents in the last
year at Precinct 22, including two fatal shootings of officers responding to
incidents, including media coverage and indictment of 5 officers and 2
detectives in a drug dealer protection scheme, low morale, and hostile neighborhood.>
If
you are being transferred to this precinct, is it better to enter with a
reputation of being feared or being respected?
Explain why, using personal example and strategic procedure.
70-100 Microsoft exam example. (can cover
1250 pages of study materials)
You
are a database developer for an online retailer. Each customer is tracked by ip, to create business intelligence tracks for ‘browser’
type customers, along with standard cookie deployment for those preparing an
order. <Click to see schema and
exhibit of existing methodology in flow chart and pseudo code>. BI division reports an increase in failed
attempts to buy from customers using mobile devices without stateful
cookie objects. Customer Support
confirms this. You are tasked with
looking at and recommending from several competing choices in scripts (1
internal, 3 commercial products) to simulate cookies with stateful
objects and allow mobile users to shop with no further problems
immediately.
Choose
a script (CLICK exhibits to see each proposal and summary) to recommend and
justify a best choice, with at least 2 reasons per strategy action group
(purchasing, sales, development, etc).
What are the benefits and problems of
using artificial skin?
Procedure for breaking down a direct question essay
(what is, who is,
when, why, where)*
Sample Question: What are the
benefits and problems of Using Artificial Skin for Scientific Testing
1) Always read the Question FIRST. Circle the thing(s) the assignment
wants you to find or answer.
[Would you circle Artificial
skin? Is the question asking you to find Artificial skin? NO. Same for
Scientific Testing. What the question *IS* asking you to find are the benefits
AND the problems. Circle the words 'benefits' and 'problems']
2) Write those terms on a
scrap section of your paper (eg on the back of the
paper, write 'benefits', skip some space, then write 'problems' and underline
both). If the terms aren’t clear, write
next to it in your own words
3)Go back and re-read the question. [The circled items will attain 'cognitive focus': subconsciously become things you look for -- eg if you are simply looking at people crossing the street, you may/may not notice someone with a red dress. But if you think 'red dress' and then look, your mind will focus on scanning for the red dress, consciously or subconsciously].
3A) If you are an average or
fast reader, read the text then go to step 4.
3B)If you are a slow reader, as you read the text, underline every important
section of the text dealing with what the question wants you to find
('benefits' and 'problems').
4) From the text (or parts of
text you underline in 3B), find/write down the answer or EVIDENCE to each term
as you find it, in the form of some buzz words or summary you will remember.
For example:
Benefits Problems
-ethical-no animals -what about info from organs working
together?
-scientific-reproduce results
easily-no variation w/diff animals
-cheaper than human trials
-screen humans for best
candidates
You could logically
"think" up/extrapolate more reasons (for example, problem could be
that lawyers could sue if the "patches" of artifical
skin tissue was not broad enough genetically and ethnically), but on an essay
question, at minimum, use what the text gives you.
NOTE: doing step 4 above can
help you if you are running out of time! If you are almost at "pencils
down," quickly write "out of time - ideas on back" at bottom of
paper. Sometimes you may get partial credit for finding the answers even if you
didn't have time to write up the essay to completion.
5) Work on an intro (see
types of introduction handout later in the course)/ Put your brainstormed idea
into a thesis form
6) Order the list of your
examples on the back: write #1 next to the ones with most evidence/strongest
case/that you understand best, down to the least evidence/weakest case/reason
you understand least. Choose as many as a)the assignment requests (for example,
'in 5 paragraphs including intro and conclusion...' you would do 2 benefits and
1
problem);
OR
b) as time allows (with at
minimum 1 benefit and 1 problem); OR
c) the standard 2-3 pieces of evidence per topic/question
asked.
START writing! Use direct quotes from the text as "Evidence" in
answering the question(s), when possible.
7)Make a concluding paragraph that restates how your points support your thesis.
Procedure for breaking down
an artistic or Stylistic “How Does” question (usually asks ‘how’)
A stylistic quality question
is different from a direct question essay in the sense that you are being asked
to discuss artistically rather than analyze or answer; or are asked about a
specific style or artistic TECHNIQUE: “how
does” the artist/business person do something/achieve an effect
specifically. You have to be careful to
discuss specific techniques or patterns, not the “what is,” in a stylistic quality question. The ‘assrro’
acronym example
Here are some
examples of a stylistic quality questions and the way many WRONGLY answer them:
1)How
does Faulkner create a setting of nostalgia?
[If
you answered, Faulkner’s novels are full of nostalgia for the old South, for
example…you would NOT be answering the
question]
2)How
does Monet’s paintings use color to fit within the impressionistic style?
[If
you answered, Monet’s paintings are bright and full of pastel colors and…, you
would NOT be answering the question]
3)
How does
[If
answered,
4)
How does a successful retail manager increase the energy level of floor
salespeople? [If answered, A successful
retail manager must be a leader instead of just a boss, you would NOT be
answering the question]
5)
How does author XXXX set the mood in his
short story….?
[If
you answered, The author sets a dark mood of depression and tragedy, you would
NOT be answering the question, you have identified the mood]
STEPS:
1) Follow STEPS 1-3 for a
direct question, standard essay
4) If you know enough about
the author, art, movement, writing, etc, to discuss the technique and answer
the question with specifics, GO FOR IT, then follow STEPS 5-7 for a direct
question/standard essay.
5) IF YOU
a) Similarities in the
text/painting/musical piece
b) Opposites (For example, funeral and birthday,
hopelessness and bliss, etc)
c)
Contrasts (bright settings
with people painted in dark colors, talking about toys while bombs are exploding,etc)
d) Repetitions (same words or sounds used, same scenes or
behavior reoccurring, etc)
e) Author (something signature or
biographical to the author)
f) Parallels (same thing happening
to A and B, what has happened to A reflected in what’s happening to B (For
example, in a story about confusion how the language parallels the content by
not using punctuation)
g) Relationships
(For example Father and Son heroes vs father and son villains in a story, the
family dynamic between parent and teenagers as model for boss/worker)
Here are some examples of how
you WOULD answer the 5 sample questions above, using the SOCRAPR patterns:
1)
Faulkner creates a setting of nostalgia by repeatedly showing the old guides
and hunters recalling their adventures, intercut with scenes of urban sprawl
and new tombstones added at the cemetery.
2)
Monet contrasts bright natural blues and greens with out of focus white and
black to…etc. He next contrasts….
3)
4) A
retail manager increases the energy level of floor salespeople by following the
relationship model of parent with multiple competing children: motivate
quietly, reward privately to prevent envy/non coolness peer pressure, and make
each think that they are the favorite as long as they are not whiny or slacking
off.
5)
The author sets the dark mood of the story in the way that has become signature
to his style: by having the world suddenly reflecting the inner feelings of the
broken hero: the sky suddenly darkens, wind ‘breaks apart the skeletons of
dying trees,’ and ‘the clouds cry for a few minutes, then move on, breaking
into nothingness.’
SAMPLE
ARTISTIC QUESTIONS: SOCRAPR at work
Similarities,
Opposites, Contrasts, Repetition, Author, Parallels, Relationships
1) “As Gregor Samsa awoke one morning from an uneasy dream he found
himself transformed into a gigantic insect.”
Q: How does the author foreshadow that
the story to follow is going to be concerned with conflict and change?
Contrast:
wakes up (peaceful sleep) to a "nightmare"
contrast:
awoke one ordinary morning (like any other morning, not "awoke one
terrible morning") to something extraordinary (he's now a giant bug)
opposites:
man vs insect, insect vs gigantic insect
2) “Damp and grotesque, climbing down to
the pits, each step was dewy, almost slimy.
The stairs were damp, jagged, like an old man's mouth driveling beyond
repair. “
Q: In this description of a stairwell,
how does the author use language to fuel the impression of it leading to
ancient horror?
a)Author
typically uses anthropocentric metaphor - old man's mouth driveling suggest
disease or age near death
b)Repeats
words for wet: damp, dewy, driveling, suggesting anyone could slip. Cthulhu ancient like horror.
c)uses
similar words that have to do with disgust: slimy, grotesque, driveling
3)Q: In the Matrix, how does the author
show the mind world as fantastically different from the body's reality, yet
still understandable in human terms?
a)
opposites: in body reality, the matrix people have to follow gravity and laws
of physics. in mind world, once the
imagination has been trained to forget physics, anything can be done.
b)contrast:
mind world is ideal, so have thousand dollars worth of clothing while in the
body reality they wear rags; in mind world the rich feast on steak, in body
reality they eat gruel
c)
repetition of human ideal SIM model objects: in mind world, for those who are
aware, hair is perfect, clothes are perfect, moves are perfect, recovery from
wounds leaves no scars.
d)
Larry W. author rumored to have had sex change: Agent smiths all look similar,
but main is different; All the viruses in the Matrix world are at least part
time humans -- the werewolves, ghosts, etc.
To allow the viewer to see the story as human characters in action.
4)Q:How does shakespeare create a
greater sense of tragedy in Hamlet?
a)
Relationships: Death and murder, with all the main characters related -- Father
and Son, Father and Daughter, Son and Mother.
b)
Similarities: poison kills the good and the evil and the vengeful; the play
within the play
c)
Contrasts: hamlet pretends to be insane but drives his beloved insane for real
with his pretending
d)
Repetition: Hamlet fails to act directly several times at the near cost and
finally cost of his life
e)
Parallelism: Poison kills the father, the son, the mother, the father-in-law,
and almost brother-in-law.